Stephan, this is a really original idea for a storybook. I think it is so great that you were able to incorporate your passion of music into your semester project for this class! One thing that I think would be really cool for you to do is to embed either a SoundCloud link or YouTube link to some music that Ravana is listening to lately, kind of like a play list or to even write some lyrics! You could add to this each week to better show us what Ravana is thinking and feeling. Since this is such an original idea, you have a lot of ways that you can go with this story. Do you have a certain plan or more of a fluid plan that allows you to adapt each week to what you are thinking is the best route? I look forward to reading more of your project this semester! Great job!
This is a really unique idea for a storybook, I don't think very many people would think of telling stories through Ravana's perspective. I always love hearing villain's sides of the stories, so I will have to check back throughout the semester to see if he's as bad as we were led to believe. In "Sita Sings the Blues," the narrators spend time discussing this exact topic, that of course Ravana was wrong for kidnapping Sita, but maybe he wasn't everything he's made out to be.
I like that you had Ravana spend the time after his battle with Rama reminiscing on his life and pursuing his passion. I read somewhere that Ravana once played an instrument made out of his own guts to try and please the gods, so I would certainly say he is passionate about music!! I think it'd be really neat to incorporate different Youtube videos in your stories to be able to portray Ravana's emotions in this light, as music can often speak much more clearly than words.
Stephan, I picked your storybook project based off of the name. I always like to learn about the perspective of the bad guy in tales to help humanize them and maybe learn that the good guy is not as good as everyone thinks. I also like that music seems to be a calming outlet for Ravana. Music therapy is used to help many different people with disabilities, plus we know that Ravana did like music previous to The Ramayana. I am curious to learn what Ravana is dying from? It could be as simple as explaining that he is dying of old age or maybe his body was not able to fully recover from the attack from Rama? There was one part in the reading I think needs to be revised. In one of the sentences in the second paragraph I was a little confused on the last part about "with nor potential reasoning for my actions." I think you just need to get rid of "nor." Great job, I can't wait to come back and read more!
Hi Stephan! I really like the direction you are taking your project. I just added to my portfolio page a story that I wrote about Ravana from his perspective as well, you should check it out! Anyways, I think you have done an absolutely fantastic job! As I was reading the introduction I couldn't help but connect what happened to Ravana to Lord Voldemort from Harry Potter. When everyone thought Lord Voldemort had vanished he was really gaining strength, which is what Ravana seems to be doing here. It seems like in your introduction Ravana has gained strength, but he is still dying. Maybe you could explain that more? Or talk about how he has turned to his music and furniture making to distract him from death. Overall, I really enjoy the subject you have chosen for your project. I look forward to reading more of your stories throughout the rest of the semester! Good luck!
Hey Stephan! I really like this idea for your storybook. I think that retelling things from Ravana’s perspective will be really interesting. We never get to see his perspective in the Ramayana and seeing his motives for everything would make for a great read. I think it is awesome that you were able to really portray Ravana’s arrogance and pretentiousness in the introduction. One weird word choice I would like to highlight is in the second paragraph: you say, “Yes, I was not the greatest person”. Wording it like that is a little awkward. Typically when people say a phrase like that it is more along the lines of, “no, I wasn’t a great person, but….”. Other than that I did not notice any glaring grammatical issues. This looks like a really fun and original idea. I am looking forward to how you are going to incorporate music into this storybook!
I already like where this is story is headed! It is a unique take on Ravana, because I only really have seen him in a very bad light. To take his story and turn it into where he becomes a musician, perhaps even a world famous one, is unique but also has a touch of humor. Ravana has always been this villain in my mind, so to imagine him as a virtuoso is so different, and I love it. I look forward to reading about his journey and to also read about his motives for what he did in the Ramayana. I did see some grammatical errors, so make sure to reread or read aloud to catch them! I struggle with catching them and find that reading aloud to myself helps me quite a bit. Other than that, it seems like you're off to a good start on your project! I look forward to coming back and reading more about Ravana.
Hi Stephan. I am a huge Ravana fan, and I love that you have decided to write from his perspective. I think you have done a really good job emphasizing Ravana's love for music. I don't know what you read for your secondary reading after the Ramayana, but if you haven't read it yet I would suggest checking out Ravana: Roar of the Demon King. It talks a lot about his origin and some of his love for music. I like that you added the part of his boon where he should be able to master music. Maybe I only feel this way because I knew what "from the top" meant coming into the story, but I felt like the first paragraph where you talk about the meaning of "from the top" could be shortened. Also, I don't know if this was just my computer or not, but when I clicked the link on your homepage to your comment wall, it wasn't working.
Hey there Stephan! How are you! Anyway, I just read your first story “From the Top” and it was really good and unique topic you took to write about Ravana. I wouldn’t have thought about writing with this kind of topic for Ravana because when you think about Ravana you think of cruel, evil, and monster with ten head but you took this story and turned into where Ravana becomes a musician, and it also has some humor to it. I like how you also talk about his life after battle with Rama and how he survived and with the remaining life he is perusing his passion that is to play music. I also know for a fact that Ravana played Ravanahatha to pleased the God of Destruction Shiva. Ravanahatha is an ancient bowed stringed instrument. And I also found some grammatical error; so make sure to reread it, it will help you help them. Anyway good topic and story.
Hi Stephan! I liked returning to your project to see what you have changed and new things that you have added. Like I said before, one of the stories in my portfolio is about Ravana and I also hint about Ravana's passion for music. Did you know that the instrument that Ravana was said to be a master of is called the veena? It is a type of string instrument. I think it would be really awesome if you incorporated the veena into your story or specified that specific type of music he plays and what he feels when he plays the music. I really like the layout of your site! It is really clean and the colors and pictures you have chosen to go along really well with everything. Good luck with the rest of your semester! I look forward to coming back to your portfolio and reading more!
Hello Stephan! I found your project enthralling due to the depiction of Ravana as something other than just a monster, instead as someone driven and passionate for a goal, something other than war and conquest. The mechanic you set up as his invulnerability as being something caused more by his family than his own desire, and the music being his actual desire, shows a good character depth in my opinion. On a technical note, your comment wall link gives a 403 error, or "Invalid Security Certificate" I would try reformatting your link and seeing if that gives you better results, because sometimes various sites handle linking protocols differently and can cause that error, even if the website behind the link is fine. Overall, I think you have a good basis for your project, projecting a greater depth of character than we have seen throughout the class reading, and I look forward to reading more a you add more stories.
Hello Stephan, I love how your storybook is set up. I really like how you made it your own. I love how you made it based on music. I think music is something that really can bring us together. I also like how you made Ravana someone who is not evil but was just misunderstood. I liked reading your stories and they kept me wanting to read. The only think I wished there was more of is music. Maybe if there were lyrics added into your stories or something along those lines. You could make up a song or add one in that is already produced. I added in a song and copied and pasted the lyrics into one of my stories and I thought it went over really well. Overall I think you did a great job. We are almost done with the semester. Keep up the good work. Good luck.
I've always wondered about Ravana's perspective! I think you do a great job of describing his disposition, because in the beginning he seemed a very well-spoken and interesting character! However, once he became Rama's mortal enemy, the story of him took his interesting, dimensional character and made him a one-note villain. I was quite tempted to write about him also, but I'm glad you did instead - you did such a better job than I would have. I'm curious what made you zero in on music, though. Did I miss some clue in the story that he was a musician or music-lover? Even if he wasn't in the original, I like that adaptation! Great work!
Stephan, I really liked how you incorporated music into your project. I'm a huge fan of music, so I love when people incorporate it into anything and everything. The Ramayana is probably my favorite thing we've done in this class, and doing your project from the perspective of Ravana was super creative and a good idea. I like how you give him some thoughts about his negative portrayal in the Ramayana, I mean who would want to be always known as the villain in their life? I also like how this project is all in first person. It really feels like Ravana is narrating the whole thing and we're just along for the ride!
Stephan, this is a really original idea for a storybook. I think it is so great that you were able to incorporate your passion of music into your semester project for this class! One thing that I think would be really cool for you to do is to embed either a SoundCloud link or YouTube link to some music that Ravana is listening to lately, kind of like a play list or to even write some lyrics! You could add to this each week to better show us what Ravana is thinking and feeling. Since this is such an original idea, you have a lot of ways that you can go with this story. Do you have a certain plan or more of a fluid plan that allows you to adapt each week to what you are thinking is the best route? I look forward to reading more of your project this semester! Great job!
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ReplyDeleteThis is a really unique idea for a storybook, I don't think very many people would think of telling stories through Ravana's perspective. I always love hearing villain's sides of the stories, so I will have to check back throughout the semester to see if he's as bad as we were led to believe. In "Sita Sings the Blues," the narrators spend time discussing this exact topic, that of course Ravana was wrong for kidnapping Sita, but maybe he wasn't everything he's made out to be.
I like that you had Ravana spend the time after his battle with Rama reminiscing on his life and pursuing his passion. I read somewhere that Ravana once played an instrument made out of his own guts to try and please the gods, so I would certainly say he is passionate about music!! I think it'd be really neat to incorporate different Youtube videos in your stories to be able to portray Ravana's emotions in this light, as music can often speak much more clearly than words.
Stephan, I picked your storybook project based off of the name. I always like to learn about the perspective of the bad guy in tales to help humanize them and maybe learn that the good guy is not as good as everyone thinks. I also like that music seems to be a calming outlet for Ravana. Music therapy is used to help many different people with disabilities, plus we know that Ravana did like music previous to The Ramayana. I am curious to learn what Ravana is dying from? It could be as simple as explaining that he is dying of old age or maybe his body was not able to fully recover from the attack from Rama? There was one part in the reading I think needs to be revised. In one of the sentences in the second paragraph I was a little confused on the last part about "with nor potential reasoning for my actions." I think you just need to get rid of "nor." Great job, I can't wait to come back and read more!
ReplyDeleteHi Stephan! I really like the direction you are taking your project. I just added to my portfolio page a story that I wrote about Ravana from his perspective as well, you should check it out! Anyways, I think you have done an absolutely fantastic job! As I was reading the introduction I couldn't help but connect what happened to Ravana to Lord Voldemort from Harry Potter. When everyone thought Lord Voldemort had vanished he was really gaining strength, which is what Ravana seems to be doing here. It seems like in your introduction Ravana has gained strength, but he is still dying. Maybe you could explain that more? Or talk about how he has turned to his music and furniture making to distract him from death. Overall, I really enjoy the subject you have chosen for your project. I look forward to reading more of your stories throughout the rest of the semester! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteHey Stephan! I really like this idea for your storybook. I think that retelling things from Ravana’s perspective will be really interesting. We never get to see his perspective in the Ramayana and seeing his motives for everything would make for a great read. I think it is awesome that you were able to really portray Ravana’s arrogance and pretentiousness in the introduction. One weird word choice I would like to highlight is in the second paragraph: you say, “Yes, I was not the greatest person”. Wording it like that is a little awkward. Typically when people say a phrase like that it is more along the lines of, “no, I wasn’t a great person, but….”. Other than that I did not notice any glaring grammatical issues. This looks like a really fun and original idea. I am looking forward to how you are going to incorporate music into this storybook!
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ReplyDeleteI already like where this is story is headed! It is a unique take on Ravana, because I only really have seen him in a very bad light. To take his story and turn it into where he becomes a musician, perhaps even a world famous one, is unique but also has a touch of humor. Ravana has always been this villain in my mind, so to imagine him as a virtuoso is so different, and I love it. I look forward to reading about his journey and to also read about his motives for what he did in the Ramayana. I did see some grammatical errors, so make sure to reread or read aloud to catch them! I struggle with catching them and find that reading aloud to myself helps me quite a bit. Other than that, it seems like you're off to a good start on your project! I look forward to coming back and reading more about Ravana.
Hi Stephan. I am a huge Ravana fan, and I love that you have decided to write from his perspective. I think you have done a really good job emphasizing Ravana's love for music. I don't know what you read for your secondary reading after the Ramayana, but if you haven't read it yet I would suggest checking out Ravana: Roar of the Demon King. It talks a lot about his origin and some of his love for music. I like that you added the part of his boon where he should be able to master music. Maybe I only feel this way because I knew what "from the top" meant coming into the story, but I felt like the first paragraph where you talk about the meaning of "from the top" could be shortened. Also, I don't know if this was just my computer or not, but when I clicked the link on your homepage to your comment wall, it wasn't working.
ReplyDeleteHey there Stephan! How are you! Anyway, I just read your first story “From the Top” and it was really good and unique topic you took to write about Ravana. I wouldn’t have thought about writing with this kind of topic for Ravana because when you think about Ravana you think of cruel, evil, and monster with ten head but you took this story and turned into where Ravana becomes a musician, and it also has some humor to it. I like how you also talk about his life after battle with Rama and how he survived and with the remaining life he is perusing his passion that is to play music. I also know for a fact that Ravana played Ravanahatha to pleased the God of Destruction Shiva. Ravanahatha is an ancient bowed stringed instrument. And I also found some grammatical error; so make sure to reread it, it will help you help them. Anyway good topic and story.
ReplyDeleteHi Stephan! I liked returning to your project to see what you have changed and new things that you have added. Like I said before, one of the stories in my portfolio is about Ravana and I also hint about Ravana's passion for music. Did you know that the instrument that Ravana was said to be a master of is called the veena? It is a type of string instrument. I think it would be really awesome if you incorporated the veena into your story or specified that specific type of music he plays and what he feels when he plays the music. I really like the layout of your site! It is really clean and the colors and pictures you have chosen to go along really well with everything. Good luck with the rest of your semester! I look forward to coming back to your portfolio and reading more!
ReplyDeleteHello Stephan! I found your project enthralling due to the depiction of Ravana as something other than just a monster, instead as someone driven and passionate for a goal, something other than war and conquest. The mechanic you set up as his invulnerability as being something caused more by his family than his own desire, and the music being his actual desire, shows a good character depth in my opinion. On a technical note, your comment wall link gives a 403 error, or "Invalid Security Certificate" I would try reformatting your link and seeing if that gives you better results, because sometimes various sites handle linking protocols differently and can cause that error, even if the website behind the link is fine. Overall, I think you have a good basis for your project, projecting a greater depth of character than we have seen throughout the class reading, and I look forward to reading more a you add more stories.
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ReplyDeleteI love how your storybook is set up. I really like how you made it your own. I love how you made it based on music. I think music is something that really can bring us together. I also like how you made Ravana someone who is not evil but was just misunderstood. I liked reading your stories and they kept me wanting to read. The only think I wished there was more of is music. Maybe if there were lyrics added into your stories or something along those lines. You could make up a song or add one in that is already produced. I added in a song and copied and pasted the lyrics into one of my stories and I thought it went over really well. Overall I think you did a great job. We are almost done with the semester. Keep up the good work. Good luck.
I've always wondered about Ravana's perspective! I think you do a great job of describing his disposition, because in the beginning he seemed a very well-spoken and interesting character! However, once he became Rama's mortal enemy, the story of him took his interesting, dimensional character and made him a one-note villain. I was quite tempted to write about him also, but I'm glad you did instead - you did such a better job than I would have. I'm curious what made you zero in on music, though. Did I miss some clue in the story that he was a musician or music-lover? Even if he wasn't in the original, I like that adaptation! Great work!
ReplyDeleteStephan, I really liked how you incorporated music into your project. I'm a huge fan of music, so I love when people incorporate it into anything and everything. The Ramayana is probably my favorite thing we've done in this class, and doing your project from the perspective of Ravana was super creative and a good idea. I like how you give him some thoughts about his negative portrayal in the Ramayana, I mean who would want to be always known as the villain in their life? I also like how this project is all in first person. It really feels like Ravana is narrating the whole thing and we're just along for the ride!
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